Today we showed the rough cut version of our film to the class; we also watched the other class’ work. In this lesson, we received some constructive criticism from the teachers and our classmates. I found this lesson very helpful as it helped us get an idea on what we need to improve on.
- This criticism wasn’t for our rough cut – it was for somebody else’s film opening. However, it was a piece of criticism which needs to be made sure of in our film to. The point was : the film opening needs to have a narrative. A common mistake for many filmmakers is not having an actual flowing story in the openings. Even though I’m definitely sure that we have it, it is always good to check that our opening follows the a narrative flow and structure.
- Moving onto the criticism of our work – the first piece of criticism is to cut down the last shot. This is completely understandable as the last shot is quite long and can become boring for the audience so, this feedback is helpful for us.
- The next piece of criticism is to sort out the sound. Some clips we have in our film opening have no sound attached to them. The first thing we did when we began making the rough cut was to put all the clips together first and then sort out the sound. After cutting down the last shot, we will then work on the diegetic and non-diegetic sound for our opening.
- The next piece of feedback is to perhaps film some more shots of Adam (the man who walks through the gate and spots the main protagonist). Since the shots we have are showing a build up to where Adam sees Blake, we could add more in and place those clips in at the start. For example, a shot at the start could show Adam coming out of his house and just going for a walk. This normal life that Adam has in the film contrasts with the unusual and dark behaviour Blake shows.
- Linking to sound, there could be some sort of non-diegetic soundtrack playing subtly in the background of the video. However, the diegetic sound we have recorded of the birds tweeting and the gravel crunching is quite effective therefore, we wouldn’t have the soundtrack concealing these effects. A good website we were recommended for a soundtrack of some sorts was: audionetwork.lgfl
We will definitely take this feedback into account and make sure we can apply it to our rough cut to make the best possible film opening which creates an atmosphere and overall mood for the audience.